The two men kissing and getting ready to make love is hot, and the fact they don’t seem to know there is someone under the bed (who would even suspect?) is just a bit creepy. Without time left to escape, Billy ends up hiding under the bed, the description of which is the funny part. What follows as Doug and Roger come back unexpectedly early is hilarious, hot, and just a little bit creepy at the same time. The feelings of regret and wishing to make things undone permeate Billy's thinking, and, never mind what he did to mess up his relationship, he definitely wants what he had back, and I felt for Billy. Not to mention the light humor that morphs into sadness when Billy tumbles into the apartment one fateful Friday that will change everything. As Sloan says, this short story was inspired by a song, but she definitely gave this version her very own, and very naughty personal twist. The whole idea of breaking into a former lover's place to lie in his bed while he is out is really funny. It was a struggle to get through this story.

After he was discovered, I was similarly detached from the other characters, found their behavior unbelievable and the erotic parts dull and uninspiring. No matter the circumstances, Billy’s odd behavior in the beginning was downright creepy and I was unable to connect with him in any way. There is more to this story which I won’t reveal here, not to spoil what little plot there is. This goes on until one day Doug and his lover come home early from dinner and Billy is discovered.īilly is not your garden-variety stalker. Billy regularly breaks into his ex-lover’s house, wears his ex-lover’s clothes, and jerks off in his bed. Generally, I prefer a little plot with my erotica, but there are times I can enjoy an erotic story that has well-written sex scenes and allows me to connect with the characters.įrom the start, The Break In did not settle well with me. I enjoyed More Than Just a Good Book, so I went into this story with high expectations.

Breathe by Sloan Parker